Dr. Jamie Bondage

I love the message to this. It is really beautiful! My own problem is with the first stanza. It doesn't flow very well. Maybe rework words? I'm not sure. I'm ...

Wow, this was good! I loved the imagery. It was so good! I loved it. I didn't see anything, so keep up the good work. Jamie (Sorry I couldn't be ...

I only saw one thing: "I watch as the drama die as quickly as you did" It should be "dies" Besides that, this is a really good, powerful poem. I ...

No, June, thanks. The storm wasn't supposed to be metaphorical. It was supposed to be a real thunder storm. Thank you for the advice, I really appriciate it. :)

This was good. It was extremely vague and short. I would suggest expanding on your ideas. What are you feeling? What are you trying to get across to the reader? ...

Wow. This was really...deep. The only mistake I saw was that in the second to last stanza you put "you" instead of "your." It seemed also just a tad repetitive, ...

This was really good! It's so sweet! I really like it! I love the message. I didn't really see any gramatical problems or phrasing. I really liked it. XD I ...

It's good. I didn't see any gramatical errors. It seemed a bit clich

This was really good! I didn't see any mistakes. I loved the feeling behind it. XD It was sweet and sad! Sorry this didn't help much. keep on writing. I ...

Wow! That was wonderful! I agree. There needs to be more punctuation. This was really good though! Extremely so! It was really powerful and moving! I loved the ending. Keep ...

It was really good! Read back through for capalization errors. There were several. But I really like it. It was very moving. XD Hope this helped! Jamie

It was really good! Read back through for capalization errors. There were several. But I really like it. It was very moving. XD Hope this helped! Jamie

I really like this! I like how you repeat "wake me up" at the end! It's really good! Keep up the good work! Sorry I couldn't be more helpful. =*( ...

I absolutely love it! It's really and wonderful! I don't know what else to say except WOW! I love this! Can't wait to read more! Jamie.

I really like this! It's sweet and wonderful! Innocence is not a bad thing. anyways, I loved it. my only suggestion is space this out where the pairs are so ...